times when I’m reading a script I catch myself checking the page number,
unconsciously hoping the read will end soon. But there are great scripts, like
Louisiana Blood, where I didn’t want the read to end.
is an extremely well written screenplay. It’s tight, and the language is
as good as the best. It had me on the edge of my seat all the way through.
I was a quarter of the way into the script I found myself saying “Wow. What
great dialogue (e.g., Roxie - "Most men don't know they can use their
mouth as a communication device" and Mrs. Dalwhinny, " Well
Gentlemen, you didn't come all the way out here just to perspire with me. What
exactly do you want?").
Indeed, Mike took me on a wonderful
Jack-the-Ripper mystery trip. Bravo Mr. Donald!
Gately – author, teacher, screenplay judge
This is a great action/thriller premise
that really delivers on its conceit. The story is jam-packed with action but
also has a great topical aspect to it (because of the financial system aspect)
that feels very current and relevant.
This script is a great high concept genre
piece with an instant built-in core audience as well as a strong hook that is
easy to articulate. Fans of the Bond movies, the Bourne trilogy, or any serious
action/thriller will have no trouble latching onto this story and finding
something to like about the concept.
The characters all feel very well rendered
overall and could be great roles for the right talent. Brickman especially
could be an outstanding role for the right supporting actor and of course
there’s loads of fun to be had in watching two potentially A-list leading men
play off of each other as Elliot and De Silva. The concept combines familiar elements in a way
that makes for a compelling concept overall.
We would like to take this opportunity to congratulating you. We received nearly a thousand scripts, out of which your script “Rose’s War” was one of the best.
From the four that were picked out of the thousand entries by the judges, Rose's War
was one of them!
It was a delightful read and something we could see being produced!
The Independent Short Film, Music & Art Festival will take place February 19-21, 2010. The award ceremony will take place on February 21, 2010.
The festival itself will take place in Long Beach, California at the historical Queen Mary.
The script is a quick read, briskly moving from one scene to
the next. But it did something very important for this kind of story, which is
grab my attention right from the very first scene.
We see David and Iona in
what at first seems like a dangerous situation, maybe a kidnapping, and then it
is revealed as a romantic excursion. Immediately after, we are in what seems
like a terrorist bomb situation with supernatural overtones, and David is blown
out of the story.
This is an action picture that starts off like lightning, and
we immediately invest in Iona and her situation. By the time supernatural
characters begin popping up, we are curious where the adventure will take her.
The villains are well sketched; kind of like the monsters
from another dimension in HELLRAISER who pop up, make a big splash, and hardly
say anything. It was impressive to see you create these villains with minimal
dialogue; and in fact the less they say and the more they do, the more
terrifying they become.
The sequence where they wipe out an entire squad of
cops silently is an action setpiece of merit, and the script has the audacity
to kill off the central character (only to revive her with that wonderful bit
of narrative tension: the ticking clock that reminds her she is running out of
Iona’s fantasy sequences have great imagery such as the
birds flying backwards and the sandstorms; the sequence with Jimmy takes them
into an interesting realm of timelessness. So the script takes imaginative
leaps beyond the CSI crime labs and makes it something unique: a crime thriller
with a revenge plot in the realm of the supernatural. Not a bad medley…
The writing style is very strong, with terse screen
directions and dialogue that gets right to the point. It doesn’t feel like a time waster. The action scenes are briskly described
and easy to follow, and the narrative through-line is clear. Iona has an
identifiable goal, and it keeps the viewer riveted as to whether she will make
it to the finish line or not, and who will still be alive when she gets there.
When we see the survivors, we feel how much everyone struggled so they may